Sunday, October 2, 2011

Fly on the Wall

You know that annoying insect constantly buzzing in your ear...well that's me. The all mighty fly, I can't be killed no matter how ,any times you swat,smack,or even throw objects at me. I'm like freaking MC Hammer-"cant touch this!" Fallowing you around your house, watching your every move. Like santaclause, "I know when you are sleeping, I know when your awake..." So you better be good. When you walk outside to trouw somwthing away, you are joined by 99 of my friends, you never get a breack from me. On holidays, I have a field day divinginto the mash potatoes and gravy. By the time I am teady to make my finale depature, I leave you a little surprise. Making my way to the attic I find a nice roomy place to lay my eggs where you will never find them. By the time you think I'm out of your lives, you'll have 30 more of me flying all around your house. You will never get ride of me, I will soon make you crazy.
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  1. Callie Ollie GailOctober 3, 2011 at 6:07 AM

    I love this, the comcept of the fly just made me laugh, and the MC Hammer quote, perfect. The only thing I would suggest to do is change the ending because it doesn't flow as much as the rest of the paragraph.

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  2. kelss.October 3, 2011 at 11:45 AM

    I really liked this:)
    Warm comment: was that it was interesting how you related this to a fly. It was unexpected!
    Cool comment: was that I think the Santa clause quote was weird in this passage, but overall really liked it:)

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