summer- I see this loving, bright future couple. The girl; black hair, tall, skinny: simply beautiful. The guy; blond hair, blue eyes, varsity football player: the whole nine yards. You see their smiles and their fingers intertwined. But when you tale a steep closer you see how their relationship has already started to deteriorate. So why would you start dating in the first place?
One year later in the fall-she puts up with so much, the cheating, the lying, and the fighting. From what it looks like she's threw with the bull sh*t. Yet at the same time she holds on. So why don't they breakup with each other?
That same year, winter- the constant flow of tears has left her face. She seems happier, no stress weighing her down. She took the chance for happiness and it turns out, the are better off apart. So why did they date?
I think this was a very good piece. I liked how you go "the girl;..." its very strong in this piece. The questions are very strong and full fill your title. Also your hook is really stong and so is this piece. To work on I would have to say maybe watch the wording so you can make it stronger and in same tense. But overall well written I really liked it(:
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